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Why are there illustrations of skull fractures in the article? Skull fractures are not a common characteristic of shaken baby syndrome. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Bticho (talk • contribs) 14:49, 19 June 2023 (UTC)
Ongoing developments
[edit]In Sweden, now that one victim of sbs (a father) has been declared innocent on appeal to the Swedish Supreme Court on the basis of a baby's blood sample after serving three years of a four-year prison sentence for sbs (the mimic of sbs was congenital rickets but no vitamin D blood test performed at birth) a group of medical practioners had the brilliant idea of using the obligatory dried blood sample that is taken from every new-born to test for vitamin-D levels.
The Swedish Council on Health Technology Assessment together with The Swedish National Council on Medical Ethics have initiated a two-year project that is ongoing and should be completed in March, 2016 on an assessment of sbs as a diagnosis. “We thought we were helping by uncovering these other medical conditions that can look like abuse, but are not abuse," Patrick Barnes, chief of pediatric neuroradiology at the Children's Hospital at Stanford University said, "It actually threatens the entire shaken baby syndrome working group and industrial complex.” RPSM (talk) 01:50, 4 May 2015 (UTC)
Eye on the Courts: Shaken Baby Syndrome Has Troubling Scientific Foundations - material from 2014
[edit]Eye on the Courts: Shaken Baby Syndrome Has Troubling Scientific Foundations RPSM (talk) 17:29, 28 October 2015 (UTC)
Learned article covers the main themes in questioning the diagnosis shaken baby syndrome
[edit]Challenging the Pathophysiologic Connection between Subdural Hematoma, Retinal Hemorrhage and Shaken Baby Syndrome. Steven C. Gabaeff, MD The author discloses he is a designated expert by the Los Angeles County Committee of Superior Court Judges “appointed to maintain a Panel of Expert Witnesses”, “providing expertise for both prosecutors and defense attorneys” in the areas of emergency medicine, child abuse and sexual assault. The author has provided expert opinions on medical-legal issues in criminal, civil and dependency matters for over 22 years in more than 1,300 consultations. RPSM (talk) 10:00, 4 February 2016 (UTC)
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Controversy in Sweden
[edit]It has been noted in many places that the diagnosis of SBS is crumbling. The recent report from the Swedish Council on Technology and Social Evaluation, and National Medical Ethics on "skakvåld" (SBS) appears to solidify this argument, noting that there is no scientific support for the SBS diagnosis based upon the constellation of findings which this article lists as forming the diagnosis, and indeed, little support demonstrating that the constellation is even a result of shaking. This article used to have a "Controversy" section, and as has been noted here before, I think it needs to be part of the article. From my perspective, I'm not sure there has been a true consensus on this issue in the last several years, but if there was, surely it must be eroding. Indeed, I'm not even certain that Sweden has a controversy at this point. They seem to have invalidated the diagnosis altogether.
The summary from Sweden's National Medical Ethics were that (my translation may not be completely accurate):
- There is insufficient scientific evidence to assess the diagnostic accuracy of the triad to identify SBS.
- There is limited scientific evidence that the triad (subdural bleeding, retinal hemorrhage, and various forms of brain dysfunction) and thus its components may occur from shaking.
- The triad or components of it can be caused by many things other than shaking.
I think that much of the "Legal Issues" section should be moved into a "Controversy" section, but I would like to hear some feedback. I don't want to put the time into it, only to have it removed.UncleHoot (talk) 18:37, 8 November 2016 (UTC)UncleHoot (talk)UncleHoot (talk) 18:37, 8 November 2016 (UTC) 13:32, 28 October 2016 (UTC)
- The diagnosis is not crumbling. That is just goofy. The concept of the "Triad" is set up as a straw man by a few skeptics. No practicing clinical would refer to the "Triad" or would use that faulty framework to practice medicine or diagnose a child. It is clear that the "Triad" as framed by Tuerkheimer is not how any physician behaves, but people use it for their political advantage. As the SBU report is still only in Swedish, only those who have read Swedish will know what is says. Most would agree with the report that there is no diagnostic value to the "Triad" (which is what the report says). They only looked at "Triad" only criteria (no other injuries or signs of impact).
- Shaking is dangerous to an infant. Even those who are skeptical all agree (Squier, Moran, Teas, Uscinski, Barnes, Findley....) This issue of the "Triad" is silly.
- Within the wiki piece on AHT, there is a section referring to how "The findings of SBS are often referred to as a "triad". Clearly whoever put that in and then cited [25] did not read [25]. It says specifically "The complex features of AHT are often disparagingly distilling simply to “The Triad”; a term devoid of any real clinical meaning and not used at all in practice." I agree with that citation.Csgreeley (talk) 00:34, 1 November 2016 (UTC)
- While awaiting the English translation of the report from Sweden, I have been poring over the Google translation and reading various news articles surrounding the findings. While some areas become nonsensical due to the bad translation, the conclusion seems to be that the diagnosis of SBS, which is largely based on the triad / constellation / RH + SDH / whatever-you-prefer-to-call-it, has little scientific foundation.
- Whether it's called a "triad," a "constellation," or "diffuse bilateral subdural and subarachnoid hemorrhage with multi-layered confluent retinal and optic nerve sheath hemorrhage in conjunction with cerebral edema" it's still the (two or) three findings that form the basis of the diagnosis. I don't believe anyone would suggest that SBS / AHT is no longer diagnosed based on those findings. These are the findings from which physicians infer child abuse caused by violent shaking (skakvåld). It's much easier to call it a triad, for purposes of brevity, if nothing else, so I'm not sure that I understand your argument. If the diagnosis is made in some other way, as you keep alluding, then perhaps you can provide a better explanation. The citation you provided references an article that you wrote (presumably), so your support for it really doesn't add much to the discussion here, but it is noteworthy. It seems that the use of the term "triad" grew into disfavor, but it still pervades much of the literature, especially in the legal system, which, perhaps, is why Sweden chose that particular nomenclature.
- The report also mentions the problem of circular reasoning, which I believe should be part of the "Controversy" section as well, given its inclusion in other medical and legal papers. It seems to be one of the main features behind the criticisms of the diagnosis.
- Regardless, I agree that we should wait for the English translation of the report to avoid potential inconsistencies due to poor translation. I also expect the AAP and perhaps other groups to release statements / letters that run contrary to these findings, which can also be cited at that time. UncleHoot (talk) 18:37, 8 November 2016 (UTC)
- Well, the Triad (the word used by Swedish doctors used as expert witnesses) or "Three components" (also used by doctors) was proof of abuse. So the Triad being used as evidence, only those three symptoms,and people were sentenced to jail for child abuse and children were taken from their mothers because they let the dad abuse the child. So the Triad is very much a real thing as it was actually used as evidence.
In the Supreme Court a dad was later acquited after the expert witness now was sceptical of the method he previously used. — Preceding unsigned comment added by 2A00:801:724:E85D:3659:6EAF:F296:994B (talk) 07:44, 29 January 2023 (UTC)
Link to Swedish report (in Swedish and English)
[edit]http://www.sbu.se/contentassets/09cc34e7666340a59137ba55d6c55bc9/skakvald_2016.pdf
RPSM (talk) 17:51, 14 December 2016 (UTC)
According to Swedish Radio, an English version of the report exists but has not yet been published as three refusals have been recieved from scientific publications so far.
An excerpt from the report is below:
Sökningen gav 3 773 abstrakt varav 1 065 beställdes i fulltext. Av dessa exkluderades 1 035 då de inte uppfyllde inklusionskriterierna. Efter kvalitetsgranskning återstod 30 artiklar varav två av medelhög kvalitet men ingen studie av hög kvalitet. Det främsta skälet till att så få studier uppfyllde kvalitetskraven var att det saknades dokumentation om fallen var erkända eller bevittnade fall av skakvåld. Resultaten baseras således på endast två studier med erkänt skakvåld. Någon sammanvägning av resultaten i en metaanalys har därför inte varit möjlig. Projektgruppen har haft en diskussion kring samstämmigheten i de inkluderade studierna.
Chapter Four
The survey turned up 3 773 abstracts of which 1 065 with full text were obtained. Of these 1 035 were excluded as they did not fulfil the critera for inclusion. After being assessed for quality, thirty articles remained of which two (2) were of medium quality but no (0) articles were of high quality. The primary reason that so few of the studies fulfilled the quality critera was that documentation was lacking of actual cases where a confession or eye witnesses were involved. An assessment of the result in a meta-analysis was therefore not possible. A discussion about the consistency of the studies that were included arose within the project group.
RPSM (talk) 15:23, 2 January 2017 (UTC)
Appendix to Swedish report giving references to all the papers that were studied and reasons for exclusion:
RPSM (talk) 12:25, 9 January 2017 (UTC)
English version of SBU Report: http://www.sbu.se/en/publications/sbu-assesses/traumatic-shaking--the-role-of-the-triad-in-medical-investigations-of-suspected-traumatic-shaking/ UncleHoot (talk) 13:27, 15 February 2017 (UTC)
Link to article
[edit]http://www.ga-innocenceproject.org/images/SBS%20Seminar-10.12.11/Plunkett%20Supplemental%20Materials/Plunkett%20Zip%20File/Uscinski%20R.%20SBS.%20Br%20J%20Neurosurg%202002.pdf RPSM (talk) 09:31, 29 December 2016 (UTC)
Article on Swedish report
[edit]Andy Coghlan Evidence of shaken baby questioned by controversial study New Scientist RPSM (talk) 16:40, 2 January 2017 (UTC)
Moran/Findley/Barnes/Squier 20012 sbs, AHT, and Actual Innocence. Getting it right.
[edit]http://repository.law.umich.edu/cgi/viewcontent.cgi?article=1559&context=articles RPSM (talk) 16:58, 2 January 2017 (UTC)
http://www.sciencedirect.com/science/article/pii/S1344622315300523
Waney Squier
[edit]I have expanded the content on Waney Squier to include details of her reinstatement following appeal. However, this section could do with further editing and expansion, which I don't have time to do. SmilingFace (talk) 13:50, 4 November 2016 (UTC)
- I have to wonder if that content is still relevant, given that she was subsequently reinstated. I'm not sure what it adds to the article as a whole. UncleHoot (talk) 18:41, 8 November 2016 (UTC)
- While reinstated for her license, she was not absolved of malfeasance.
- Mitting said that the tribunal was justified in some cases in deciding that she had misrepresented the findings of the court, was deliberately misleading, acted outside her area of expertise, and failed to be objective and unbiased. But he ruled that many of the findings against her were unjustified, and he said that tribunals needed more understanding of the difficulties of being an expert witness in an adversarial court system where proceedings were controlled by judges and lawyers.
- A GMC spokesperson said, “Mr Justice Mitting has confirmed that this case was not about scientific debate and the rights and wrongs of the scientific evidence but the manner in which Dr Squier gave evidence. The ruling makes clear that she acted irresponsibly in her role as an expert witness on several occasions, acted beyond her expertise and lacked objectivity, and sought to cherrypick research which it was clear did not support her opinions.” Csgreeley (talk) 00:56, 13 November 2016 (UTC)
- The point is, this is not an article about Dr. Squier, and I cannot see a reason to make a "Waney Squier" section in the article. It held relevance when the court had found her guilty of "lying" among other charges. As you note, this is now simply about the way she testified in court. It is not about AHT or the diagnosis of AHT, nor does it have any legal impact on the diagnosis and the way it is handled in courts, except for the obvious chilling effect among defense witnesses, which, perhaps, is relevant.UncleHoot (talk) 16:56, 17 November 2016 (UTC)
This was a letter to the editor of DN - main broadsheet in Sweden
[edit]An initiative by two Swedish physicians representing a group of doctors, lawyers engineers, etc who contributed their time voluntarily and could not help noticing some inconsistencies in the cases which had been diagnosed with shaken baby syndrome causing their group to grow with new victims affected by this diagnosis.
They decided to apply to Statens beredning för medicinsk och social utvärdering, (The Swedish Agency for Health Technology Assessment and Assessment of Social Services) to conduct an impartial assessment of the diagnosis.
http://www.dn.se/debatt/rattslaget-osakert-for-spadbarnsforaldrar/ RPSM (talk) 15:59, 3 January 2017 (UTC)
Comment from Utah Law review article
[edit]Some may argue that we need not worry about judicial inexperience with science because it is just this inexperience that will steer a Justice toward reputable journals and away from dubious junk science. But this logic is not completely reassuring. . . . Justices cite authorities with a terrific range of prestige and reputation. Yes, they rely on articles in the New England Journal of Medicine, but they also cite to blog posts, sporting magazines, interest group websites, and (in lower courts) even to Wikipedia. RPSM (talk) 16:54, 27 January 2017 (UTC)
Paper which deals with lay (non-medical) and non-"mainstream" views: Article reference: http://epubs.utah.edu/index.php/ulr/article/viewFile/1195/871 RPSM (talk) 11:53, 30 January 2017 (UTC)
Paper which includes links to both sides of the controversy RPSM (talk) 12:22, 30 January 2017 (UTC)
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Paper describing the Swedish official review of shaken baby syndrome
[edit](Swedish Agency for Health Technology Assment and Assessment of Social Services) http://onlinelibrary.wiley.com/doi/10.1111/apa.13760/pdf RPSM (talk) 15:06, 16 June 2017 (UTC)
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Link to 2010 paper
[edit][Published online 2010 Sep 29.Unexplained Fractures: Child Abuse or Bone Disease? A Systematic Review RPSM (talk) 08:20, 7 August 2017 (UTC)
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Reporting of Shaken Baby Syndrome in Sweden
[edit]https://www.expressen.se/nyheter/hovratten-mamman-far-inte-vardnaden/ RPSM (talk) 21:34, 1 January 2020 (UTC)
In a series of articles in the tabloid Expressen, the journalist Claes Pettersson described the developments in a number of cases misdiagnosed as shaken baby syndrome and what happened to the parents and children involved as well as the group set up to make diagnose "shaken baby syndrome", which, after the publication of the scandal, was disbanded. RPSM (talk) 21:48, 1 January 2020 (UTC)
Multiple issues June 2021
[edit]Unbalanced
[edit]- The article, especially the introduction, does not clearly state the controversy surrounding the topic. Namely that the pediatric community and forensic pathologists have opposing views regarding if the signs and symptoms of SBS are pathognomonic for parental violence. [1][2][3]
- Since the causal relationship between specific signs and symptoms and parental violence is disputed, even among experts, the article needs to be reviewed and rewritten so it does not explicitly favor any one of these viewpoints. For example, the risk factors section implies that parental violence is the cause. Same with later sections.
Neutrality of introduction
[edit]- As noted above, the introduction in particular is heavily leaning towards establishing parental violence as the cause. As even the name of the diagnosis is controversial, the article's introduction should highlight the controversial aspects more clearly.
Introduction relies on a single source
[edit]- The introduction and diagnosis fact box relies too much on the first reference, and since the topic is controversial, more sources needs to be included to provide a balanced and neutral overview of the facts surrounding the diagnosis.
Synthesis of material in introduction
[edit]The cause may be blunt trauma or vigorous shaking.[1] Often this occurs as a result of a caregiver becoming frustrated due to the child crying.[3] Diagnosis can be difficult as symptoms may be nonspecific.[1]
- This refers to the beginning of the second paragraph of the introduction, quoted above, where the first and third reference are interspersed with different sentences. Clearly a case of source synthesis to make the strengthen the causal claim.
Cleanup rewrite
[edit]- The later parts of the article (e.g. Diagnosis) suffers from what seems to be edits from both sides trying to impose their viewpoints, making the article cluttered and makes it so neither side's claims is clearly stated. The structure of the article may need to be modified so that the controversy is better highlighted, and so accurate claims from either side is presented. Not sure how this is best done, if everything is piled into a controversy section, this section could grow to take over the entire article.
Strange-attractor (talk) 13:02, 30 June 2021 (UTC)
References
- ^ https://www.theguardian.com/news/2017/dec/08/shaken-baby-syndrome-war-over-convictions
- ^ https://www.newscientist.com/article/mg23230994-100-evidence-of-shaken-baby-questioned-by-controversial-study/
- ^ https://slate.com/news-and-politics/2017/12/shaken-baby-science-has-been-discredited-and-many-convictions-must-be-reconsidered.html
Unexplained Acronym
[edit]The article refrers to "MPT" (penultimate paragraph) but it's meaning is not given. Dorcots (talk) 21:58, 20 January 2022 (UTC)
- Medical Practitioners Tribunal Service. I've added the appropriate link. Tevildo (talk) 17:32, 18 August 2022 (UTC)
The Syndrome (documentary)
[edit]https://www.imdb.com/title/tt3183936/?ref_=tt_urv
Seems relevant, but not mentioned in the article. Why? 46.24.26.231 (talk) 16:13, 4 March 2023 (UTC)
- The answer is pretty simple: It's not a "reliable source," especially for a medical condition. As this diagnosis generates a lot of controversy, there have also been books written on this topic taking different positions. If there is a reasonable way to list these without running afoul of NPOV, that might be a good way to handle it. Sharing the viewpoint of The Syndrome, there is also Flawed Convictions: "Shaken Baby Syndrome" and the Inertia of Injustice by Deborah Tuerkheimer, and The Forensic Unreliability of the Shaken Baby Syndrome by Randy Papetti. UncleHoot (talk) 19:24, 27 March 2023 (UTC)
New evidence coming out that Shaken Baby Syndrome is not a real diagnosis
[edit]Would be good to add some of this to the page: https://www.cambridgeblog.org/2023/05/a-journey-into-the-shaken-baby-syndrome-abusive-head-trauma-controversy/ Ergzay (talk) 05:41, 27 September 2023 (UTC)
- This isn't 'evidence' this is someone being misdiagnosed. Misdiagnosis happen. If anyone is wondering where this 'controversy' is ACTUALLY coming from - it's from right wing weirdos. Look at the conservapedia page on the subject... it's a new battlefront for weirdos that kill their children. 73.25.229.121 (talk) 16:17, 2 July 2024 (UTC)
Retino-dural hemorrhage of infancy
[edit]I've seen the term "retino-dural hemorrhage of infancy" used in a couple of places in the literature.([1],[2]) This seems to be a new term that is intended to avoid the implied judgement in the name "shaken baby syndrome", and while it's not yet widely used, it's of particular interest that Norman Guthkelch, the original discoverer of SBS, is using the term. Is this getting any traction? Should it be in the article? — The Anome (talk) 15:40, 27 September 2023 (UTC)
Wiki Education assignment: Foundations II
[edit] This article was the subject of a Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment, between 1 June 2024 and 17 August 2024. Further details are available on the course page. Student editor(s): Jrdimapasoc, Lhuang9, S.Huang, Future UCSF PharmD, Rayhuang347 (article contribs). Peer reviewers: Bbadhesha, Ucstudybd, C.chang04, Clcorp.
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Editing plan.
[edit]- Add at least one citation by the end of the first class.
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Peer Review
[edit]Peer Review by Group #3 (Balpreet, Bill, Cindy, and Christine).
Person 1 (Balpreet):
-Question 1: Do the group’s edits substantially improve the article as described in the Wikipedia peer review “Guiding framework”?
Yes, this group did a great job making edits to improve the article overall. I was able to use the history function to compare revisions made earlier to the article (to see the original article) with the ones the group made recently and I was able to see great revisions made. New information was added to help amplify and clarify some of the information as well as help deepen the topic that was being discussed. One of the group members added some information about Vitamin D deficiency and I believe this addition was great to deepen the conversation as well as bring awareness of how this deficiency can be a cause for this syndrome. In addition, I saw some minor changes that were completed as well such as writing out the month instead of having the month in a number format and I believe this was a great chance to help make it easier for the audience to read the article. One feedback for this group that I would have is to provide resources in the "See Also" section of outside reads for the audience to read and to move the "History" section towards the beginning of the article. Lastly, I would discuss other causes of this condition such as new parents, unrealistic expectations of the baby, etc. Overall, the improvements made have improved the article greatly. Great job!
-Question 2: Has the group achieved its overall goals for improvement?
I was not able to see the group's clear goals for overall improvement. I was able to see their outline for the article and the plan they have to work on the article but no indication of the goals that were made of how the article will be improved. The group seems to be following their plan (which group member is handling what section and it seems like the group is consistently working on the article and adding the needed references). So great job following your plan for the article but please try to add goals to see at the end if you were able to achieve your goals with the article.
-Question 3a: Does the draft submission reflect a neutral point of view?
Yes, the draft submission reflects a neutral point of view. After reading the entire article I did not see any bias. It seems that facts were provided with credible sources to explain more about this syndrome without being biased about anything. This group ensured they did not choose one situation that caused the syndrome or focus on one specific area. Instead, the group chose to provide information broadly to provide information without being biased. The original article did not seem to have any bias either and seemed to have a neutral point of view as well.
Person 2 (Bill):
-Question 1 : Do the group’s edits substantially improve the article as described in the Wikipedia peer review “Guiding framework”?
This article does a good job of explaining what shaken baby syndrome is. The wording is clear and concise, and I did not notice any grammatical errors. The article maintains a neutral tone, and content-wise, it is comprehensive in covering the health and legal implications of shaken baby syndrome, as well as the controversies around the mechanism of injury. I have a few thoughts on ways the article could be further improved. First, the introduction section (paragraphs under article title) could be subdivided into section, such as "symptoms," "causes," and "epidemiology," to provide an introduction to the rest of the article's structure. In the section "Differential diagnosis," the "gestational problems" paragraph is vague and lacks description of what is going wrong in gestation. Great job with the article!
-Question 2: Has the group achieved its overall goals for improvement?
Yes, it appears so.
-Question 3b: Are the claims included verifiable with cited secondary sources that are freely available?
As for references, one of the cited journal articles, "Self-Reported Prevalence and Risk Factors for Shaking and Smothering Among Mothers of 4-Month-Old Infants in Japan," is a study report. Primary sources are not appropriate for Wikipedia. Other than that I did not notice any issues with the references, besides some being paywalled, which is difficult to avoid.
Person 3 (Cindy):
-Question 1 : Do the group’s edits substantially improve the article as described in the Wikipedia peer review “Guiding framework”?
Yes the group's edits have improved the article. Seeing the information that was already in this article before their edits, I thought the page already contained sufficient information. This group expanded on much of the information that was present in the article, such as definitions, mechanisms, epidemiology, and so on. Overall, not only is new information added to the article, some parts were even elaborated more on. One thing I think could be improved on is that maybe the treatment part could be expanded on a little more. The surgery treatment seems pretty invasive, and if there were risks of the treatment or if there are any alternative treatment options, I think it would add value to the article.
-Question 2: Has the group achieved its overall goals for improvement?
Yes, I thought that every topic that was mentioned in this group's plan had been expanded upon.
-Question 3c: Are the edits formatted consistent with Wikipedia’s manual of style? Yes, I would say the edits are formatted appropriately. The use of headliners and subheadlines is correct, and it was easy to relate what I was reading to the matching category. Overall the article looks organized and easy to follow.C.chang04 (talk) 00:37, 31 July 2024 (UTC)
Person 4 (Christine):
-Question 1 : Do the group’s edits substantially improve the article as described in the Wikipedia peer review “Guiding framework”?
-Question 2: Has the group achieved its overall goals for improvement?
-Question 3d:Do the edits reflect language that supports diversity, equity, and inclusion? Bbadhesha (talk) 21:37, 26 July 2024 (UTC)
- Person 4 (Christine):
- Question 1 : Do the group’s edits substantially improve the article as described in the Wikipedia peer review “Guiding framework”?
- -Yes, the group’s edits substantially improve the article. The group did a great job adding new and important information, such as adding definitions, adding text with link attached to it (which is very useful), adding Vit D deficiency in the differential diagnosis, expanding on the mechanism, prevention, epidemiology and Legal issues section of the article and so on. The group’s edits made this article a more informative and reliable resource. One recommendation that I have for the article is making some changes chronologically like moving the history and epidemiology sections near the beginning of the article so that there’s a better flow when reading through the article. Overall, with their edits, the article had a significant improvement in the overall quality and usefulness of the article especially to those who are interested in learning more about Shaken Baby Syndrome.
- Question 2: Has the group achieved its overall goals for improvement?
- -By looking at the group’s editing plan, I can see how they plan to improve the article by assigning each group member several sections that they would be working on to achieve their improvement goal. Everyone contributed on their assigned section and added useful information which resulted to achieving their overall improvement plan/goal in the assigned article.
- Question 3d: Do the edits reflect language that supports diversity, equity, and inclusion?
- -The edits made reflects language that supports diversity, equity and inclusion because the language used were inclusive like for example “parents or caregivers of any gender.” Clcorp (talk) 20:58, 29 July 2024 (UTC)